I'm stuck on a scene for the work in progress.
The man my heroine is almost-engaged to demonstrates that he is not the hero. I need him to unconsciously reveal that he is marrying JJ for her money. Unconsciously, like a Freudian slip.
She wasn't cynical or hard-nosed enough to see marriage as a purely business transaction. While she didn't think they had a love match, she had believed they could make a real marriage based on respect, shared values and mutual support--or if not real, something that would pass for real.
Now she realizes for him it is a business deal--one that he's not sure he will get enough out of. I need to drive her to the point she's willing to out-and-out buy a husband, a man she hardly knows.
The hardest part about writing a contemporary marriage of convenience plot is to motivate it. Fortunately, modern women have many more choices than marriage to solve their problems.
So I know where this scene ends her up emotionally. I want her to feel seriously bleak about her future, but still willing to go forward, thinking it was good she got disillusioned when she did.
So what does the almost fiance say to reveal his true colors?
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